作业帮懂英语的帮忙改下语法错误!
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懂英语的帮忙改下语法错误!
这是口语课要上台讲的叙述性演讲,麻烦高手帮我改改语法错误.
Today,I’m going to tell you an ride experience I had some time ago.It was heart-stopping.
Two weeks ago,I and my little sister waited for buses together on the side of the road.We waited and waited for ages.Finally,the bus was coming,We shoved onto the bus with great effort.The seat on the bus already sat full person .We chatted as usual.As the weather was dull,rainy,and misty ,the car was being driven slowly .When the bus reach the crossroad,suddenly,a man rushed up and grabed the door aggressively.The driver had to stop and let him in.The man in khaki coat began to speak the bad language when he got on the bus.Not only that ,he was just standing at the door and it open No matter how hard driver and conductor tried to persuade him,he just wouldn't listen!At first,the conductor persuade with patience.But the man not only wouldn't close the door but throw out the conductor’s ticket book.The conductor was irritated and condemned the man’s action.The man’s anger was sparked by the condemnation.He shook the door vehemently as if to tear down it.Many parts of the door was dropped.Everyone was terrified and no one ventured to stop it,for there are almost student on the bus.What is more,he snatched up an object and hitted the window forcefully.A girl sat beside the window was frightened into crying by his violence.Many students included my little sister also started to scream.The man roared very loudly said:”Be quiet”!I know I must acted bravely,or my little sister will more afraid.Fortunately,the window was rigidly ,the man couldn’t broke the window and so gave it up.Then,the man started to complain,said:”I had waited for more than an hour!Is this the kind of good survice you give to me?I happened to have a bad mood today!You hard luck!” The car kept moving .By this time ,the man ordered the driver overtake the car in front.The driver listened to him and did as he said.After overtake,the man casted an object to that car.Our bus arrived at stoplight,the man ran toward that bus.The driver drove the bus off quickly.The conductor said,that bus was originally didn’t stop lift him before our car arrived crossroad!Everybady on our bus was guessing what the man would do to that bus!
这是口语课要上台讲的叙述性演讲,麻烦高手帮我改改语法错误.
Today,I’m going to tell you an ride experience I had some time ago.It was heart-stopping.
Two weeks ago,I and my little sister waited for buses together on the side of the road.We waited and waited for ages.Finally,the bus was coming,We shoved onto the bus with great effort.The seat on the bus already sat full person .We chatted as usual.As the weather was dull,rainy,and misty ,the car was being driven slowly .When the bus reach the crossroad,suddenly,a man rushed up and grabed the door aggressively.The driver had to stop and let him in.The man in khaki coat began to speak the bad language when he got on the bus.Not only that ,he was just standing at the door and it open No matter how hard driver and conductor tried to persuade him,he just wouldn't listen!At first,the conductor persuade with patience.But the man not only wouldn't close the door but throw out the conductor’s ticket book.The conductor was irritated and condemned the man’s action.The man’s anger was sparked by the condemnation.He shook the door vehemently as if to tear down it.Many parts of the door was dropped.Everyone was terrified and no one ventured to stop it,for there are almost student on the bus.What is more,he snatched up an object and hitted the window forcefully.A girl sat beside the window was frightened into crying by his violence.Many students included my little sister also started to scream.The man roared very loudly said:”Be quiet”!I know I must acted bravely,or my little sister will more afraid.Fortunately,the window was rigidly ,the man couldn’t broke the window and so gave it up.Then,the man started to complain,said:”I had waited for more than an hour!Is this the kind of good survice you give to me?I happened to have a bad mood today!You hard luck!” The car kept moving .By this time ,the man ordered the driver overtake the car in front.The driver listened to him and did as he said.After overtake,the man casted an object to that car.Our bus arrived at stoplight,the man ran toward that bus.The driver drove the bus off quickly.The conductor said,that bus was originally didn’t stop lift him before our car arrived crossroad!Everybady on our bus was guessing what the man would do to that bus!
Today,I’m going to tell you an ride experience I had some time ago.It was heart-stopping.
Two weeks ago,I and my little sister(My sister and I 英语习惯性把别人放前面) waited for buses together on the side of the road.We waited and waited for ages（for age表达的时间太长了,for a long time就可以了）.Finally,the bus was coming,We shoved onto the bus with great effort.The seat（seats） on the bus （have all been taken）.We chatted as usual.As the weather was dull,rainy and misty ,the car(bus) was being driven（用was going就可以了,表达没那么生硬） slowly .When the bus reach the(a) crossroad,suddenly,a man rushed up(turned up 出现,rush up冲上去,作为你是第一人称在车上,用rush up比较不适合) and grabed the door aggressively.The driver had to stop and let him in.The man in khaki coat began to speak bad languages when he got on the bus.Not only that ,he was just standing at the door and had（让） it open !No matter how hard the （特指）driver and the conductor tried to persuade him,he just wouldn't listen（listen 改为follow 听从）!At first,the conductor persuade with patience.But the man not only wouldn't（改为refused to拒绝,这样前后表达起来动词比较连贯） close the door but also throw out the conductor’s ticket book.The conductor was irritated and condemned the man’s action.The man’s anger was sparked by the condemnation.He shook the door vehemently as if to tear down it（it down 代词放中间）.Many parts of the door was （was去掉,不需要被动）dropped.Everyone was terrified and no one ventured to stop it,for there are almost student（students） on the bus.What is more,he snatched up an object and hitted the（a） window forcefully.A girl sat beside the window was frightened into crying by his violence.Many students included my little sister also（去掉） started to scream.The man roared very loudly said（去掉,roar本身就可以表达）:”Be quiet”!I know I must acted bravely,or my little sister will （加be）more afraid.Fortunately,the window was rigidly（rigid用形容词） ,the man couldn’t broke the window and so gave it up（gave up）.Then,the man started to complain,said（去掉）:”I had （have 直接引语不要过去完成）waited for more than an hour!Is this the kind of good survice you give to me?I happened to have a bad mood today!You （加are） hard luck!” The car kept moving .By this time ,the man ordered the driver （加to）overtake the car in front.The driver listened to him and did as he said.After overtake（overtaking ）,the man casted（cast过去式还是cast） an object to that car.Our bus arrived at a stoplight,the man (got off the bus and补上,意思比较连贯)ran toward that bus.The driver drove the bus off quickly.The conductor said,that bus was originally（was orginally 去掉） didn’t stop （to）lift（改为take） him before our car（bus?） arrived （加the）crossroad!Everybady（Everybody） on our bus was guessing what the man would do to that bus!
请你自己注意下到底是car还是bus,我看到后面都糊涂了,超车的时候是car结果变成下车去追bus.
觉得可以的话,顶上去
Two weeks ago,I and my little sister(My sister and I 英语习惯性把别人放前面) waited for buses together on the side of the road.We waited and waited for ages（for age表达的时间太长了,for a long time就可以了）.Finally,the bus was coming,We shoved onto the bus with great effort.The seat（seats） on the bus （have all been taken）.We chatted as usual.As the weather was dull,rainy and misty ,the car(bus) was being driven（用was going就可以了,表达没那么生硬） slowly .When the bus reach the(a) crossroad,suddenly,a man rushed up(turned up 出现,rush up冲上去,作为你是第一人称在车上,用rush up比较不适合) and grabed the door aggressively.The driver had to stop and let him in.The man in khaki coat began to speak bad languages when he got on the bus.Not only that ,he was just standing at the door and had（让） it open !No matter how hard the （特指）driver and the conductor tried to persuade him,he just wouldn't listen（listen 改为follow 听从）!At first,the conductor persuade with patience.But the man not only wouldn't（改为refused to拒绝,这样前后表达起来动词比较连贯） close the door but also throw out the conductor’s ticket book.The conductor was irritated and condemned the man’s action.The man’s anger was sparked by the condemnation.He shook the door vehemently as if to tear down it（it down 代词放中间）.Many parts of the door was （was去掉,不需要被动）dropped.Everyone was terrified and no one ventured to stop it,for there are almost student（students） on the bus.What is more,he snatched up an object and hitted the（a） window forcefully.A girl sat beside the window was frightened into crying by his violence.Many students included my little sister also（去掉） started to scream.The man roared very loudly said（去掉,roar本身就可以表达）:”Be quiet”!I know I must acted bravely,or my little sister will （加be）more afraid.Fortunately,the window was rigidly（rigid用形容词） ,the man couldn’t broke the window and so gave it up（gave up）.Then,the man started to complain,said（去掉）:”I had （have 直接引语不要过去完成）waited for more than an hour!Is this the kind of good survice you give to me?I happened to have a bad mood today!You （加are） hard luck!” The car kept moving .By this time ,the man ordered the driver （加to）overtake the car in front.The driver listened to him and did as he said.After overtake（overtaking ）,the man casted（cast过去式还是cast） an object to that car.Our bus arrived at a stoplight,the man (got off the bus and补上,意思比较连贯)ran toward that bus.The driver drove the bus off quickly.The conductor said,that bus was originally（was orginally 去掉） didn’t stop （to）lift（改为take） him before our car（bus?） arrived （加the）crossroad!Everybady（Everybody） on our bus was guessing what the man would do to that bus!
请你自己注意下到底是car还是bus,我看到后面都糊涂了,超车的时候是car结果变成下车去追bus.
觉得可以的话,顶上去