作业帮英语高手过来帮我看看有什么语法错误!
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英语高手过来帮我看看有什么语法错误!
good morning guys ,it’s my honor to stand here and give you my presentation .my name is wu fengxuan .my topic is job description .and what I’m going to talk is salesperson.
With 80% of the world's billionaires starts from STEVE BALLMER.Sales of the first job is selling ice cream and sweets in procter &gamble.Now,we are looking for a job,I think a lot of classmates will to sales interested.Then I'll introduce sales this industry.
Sales is what?Not surprisingly,is marketing and sales.
Salesman responsible scope is to provide customers with services and help customer to choose the most satisfied products.I once in Canon company trained,a good salesman may according to the customer's age,identity and purpose for customers to choose the most suitable products.For instance you are selling camera,your customer is the student's words,he recommended to him novel style,color beautiful camera.If mature commercial personage,maybe he on camera pixels,performance as more demanding,can be recommended to him,such as luxury points SLR cameras.If it's family photos of words,recommend ordinary cameras,simple operation.
However,what every salesperson duties?A good salesman for customers with a lot of useful information,stood in the company's point of view,the salesman every responsibility have:
1,know you the sales of products,such as types,and the function and its price now,customers are specialization,if you don't know your products,then your pushing hard to convince.
2,understanding your opponent.For example,the Canon competitor is SONY Ericsson,you must understand the SONY Ericsson products,know their strengths and weaknesses.
3,Understand the store's sales,inventory and replenishment requirements in a timely manner to reflect the charge.
4,Speed of product design based on logistic logistics time for their products.
good morning guys ,it’s my honor to stand here and give you my presentation .my name is wu fengxuan .my topic is job description .and what I’m going to talk is salesperson.
With 80% of the world's billionaires starts from STEVE BALLMER.Sales of the first job is selling ice cream and sweets in procter &gamble.Now,we are looking for a job,I think a lot of classmates will to sales interested.Then I'll introduce sales this industry.
Sales is what?Not surprisingly,is marketing and sales.
Salesman responsible scope is to provide customers with services and help customer to choose the most satisfied products.I once in Canon company trained,a good salesman may according to the customer's age,identity and purpose for customers to choose the most suitable products.For instance you are selling camera,your customer is the student's words,he recommended to him novel style,color beautiful camera.If mature commercial personage,maybe he on camera pixels,performance as more demanding,can be recommended to him,such as luxury points SLR cameras.If it's family photos of words,recommend ordinary cameras,simple operation.
However,what every salesperson duties?A good salesman for customers with a lot of useful information,stood in the company's point of view,the salesman every responsibility have:
1,know you the sales of products,such as types,and the function and its price now,customers are specialization,if you don't know your products,then your pushing hard to convince.
2,understanding your opponent.For example,the Canon competitor is SONY Ericsson,you must understand the SONY Ericsson products,know their strengths and weaknesses.
3,Understand the store's sales,inventory and replenishment requirements in a timely manner to reflect the charge.
4,Speed of product design based on logistic logistics time for their products.
一入眼就看见你的第一段全部首字母都没有大写!
再问： 我想知道的是语法上面的错误,大写小写都是我自己看的,不怕~
再答： 太长了……得花一定时间……
再问： 不急~~慢慢来,发现了告诉我!
再答： 这位兄台，你这文章里真的有很多的错误……我只看了前一半就看不了了…… “and what I’m going to talk is salesperson”，你这里应该用“talk about ”吧，因为你要讲的是你的观点看法，应该是谈论、讨论性质的；talk about sth，光用个talk 就像少了什么一样 Sales of the first job is selling ice cream and sweets in procter &gamble.这个反了，应该是the first job of sales is……，此外，ice cream and sweets in procter &gamble，不应该是用in，而是of 吧。表示“宝洁出品的冰激凌和糖果” I think a lot of classmates will to sales interested. 注意：你怎么能在will 后面用to呢！！will 后面一切动词都是用原型的，不跟什么to的！ Then I'll introduce sales this industry，你的原意是想说“下面我将介绍销售这个行业”吧？直接写sales industry就行了。sales industry就是指“销售行业” Sales is what? Not surprisingly, is marketing and sales。应该是：what is sales?it is marketing and saleing，因为你前面用了marketing 动名词，后面应该用并列的形式saleing，表示“销售是什么？是营销和出售” and help customer to choose the most satisfied products.注意英语中都是“help sb do sth”，帮助某人做某事 I once in Canon company trained，你的原意是“我以前曾在佳能公司培训过”，你可以写成“once i was one of the trainees of Canon”我曾是佳能的培训员工之一，或者写成“once i got the training in Canon”我曾在佳能得到过培训。 鉴于我没有那么多空闲时间来看完全部内容，以上就是我的一点意见和建议，纯属个人观点。我建议你不如再花点时间好好琢磨一下你的文章，因为我发现你的文章里有好多错误。就比如你的那句“Then I'll introduce sales this industry”，“你想介绍销售这个行业”，这是典型的“中英语”chinglish形式。建议你找一找你的英语老师先帮你看看，批改一下，再自己润色一番。我的英语水平肯定不敢和专业的英语老师相比，所以我真心真意的建议你找专业人士帮帮忙。以上就是我的建议，如果不好，你可以再找别人帮忙。
再问： 你好专业!谢谢!我是用翻译工具弄的~唉!我也知道很烂,连我自己都看不懂的,不过,真的谢谢你!
再答： 客气了，真心的祝你能修改好你的文章！
再问： 看了你的修改,我感觉我那个真的好搞笑~好的,我自己改了!
再问： 我想知道的是语法上面的错误,大写小写都是我自己看的,不怕~
再答： 太长了……得花一定时间……
再问： 不急~~慢慢来,发现了告诉我!
再答： 这位兄台，你这文章里真的有很多的错误……我只看了前一半就看不了了…… “and what I’m going to talk is salesperson”，你这里应该用“talk about ”吧，因为你要讲的是你的观点看法，应该是谈论、讨论性质的；talk about sth，光用个talk 就像少了什么一样 Sales of the first job is selling ice cream and sweets in procter &gamble.这个反了，应该是the first job of sales is……，此外，ice cream and sweets in procter &gamble，不应该是用in，而是of 吧。表示“宝洁出品的冰激凌和糖果” I think a lot of classmates will to sales interested. 注意：你怎么能在will 后面用to呢！！will 后面一切动词都是用原型的，不跟什么to的！ Then I'll introduce sales this industry，你的原意是想说“下面我将介绍销售这个行业”吧？直接写sales industry就行了。sales industry就是指“销售行业” Sales is what? Not surprisingly, is marketing and sales。应该是：what is sales?it is marketing and saleing，因为你前面用了marketing 动名词，后面应该用并列的形式saleing，表示“销售是什么？是营销和出售” and help customer to choose the most satisfied products.注意英语中都是“help sb do sth”，帮助某人做某事 I once in Canon company trained，你的原意是“我以前曾在佳能公司培训过”，你可以写成“once i was one of the trainees of Canon”我曾是佳能的培训员工之一，或者写成“once i got the training in Canon”我曾在佳能得到过培训。 鉴于我没有那么多空闲时间来看完全部内容，以上就是我的一点意见和建议，纯属个人观点。我建议你不如再花点时间好好琢磨一下你的文章，因为我发现你的文章里有好多错误。就比如你的那句“Then I'll introduce sales this industry”，“你想介绍销售这个行业”，这是典型的“中英语”chinglish形式。建议你找一找你的英语老师先帮你看看，批改一下，再自己润色一番。我的英语水平肯定不敢和专业的英语老师相比，所以我真心真意的建议你找专业人士帮帮忙。以上就是我的建议，如果不好，你可以再找别人帮忙。
再问： 你好专业!谢谢!我是用翻译工具弄的~唉!我也知道很烂,连我自己都看不懂的,不过,真的谢谢你!
再答： 客气了，真心的祝你能修改好你的文章！
再问： 看了你的修改,我感觉我那个真的好搞笑~好的,我自己改了!