作业帮请帮我看下这篇英语作文有没有问题!
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请帮我看下这篇英语作文有没有问题!
It maybe a little brusque for me to write this letter to you.
But...
beacuse of today is my birthday,
I want to convey my mood on this day...
By chance I kow you.I like your music and voice
It sounds wonderful and it can give me power.
On my spare time,I read your blog though I don't fully understand.
But I am very glad to you can share something about you with fans.
It can help me konw more about you.
I want to see your live that I can feel the charm of you in Japan.
You're the motive force to keep me go forward.
I'm not gotta think of the possibility whether I will be successful.
I hope my dream will come true some day.
I think I'll try my best to do.
If you can reply to me.It must be the best gift that I've received.
Last,please keep your struggle all along.
I'll support you forever!
（I am not good at japanese.So...and excuse me for any mistakes since my poor English.）
请认真仔细地帮我查看一下吧,希望能有真心的朋友帮助我,因为这篇作文真的是非常重要啊!而且我想把这篇作文写得委婉有礼貌一下,可惜各种有心无力,如果有什么建议的请提出来,我会感谢你们的出手相助的~
= =其实我已经修改完毕了。囧
It maybe a little brusque for me to write this letter to you.
But...
beacuse of today is my birthday,
I want to convey my mood on this day...
By chance I kow you.I like your music and voice
It sounds wonderful and it can give me power.
On my spare time,I read your blog though I don't fully understand.
But I am very glad to you can share something about you with fans.
It can help me konw more about you.
I want to see your live that I can feel the charm of you in Japan.
You're the motive force to keep me go forward.
I'm not gotta think of the possibility whether I will be successful.
I hope my dream will come true some day.
I think I'll try my best to do.
If you can reply to me.It must be the best gift that I've received.
Last,please keep your struggle all along.
I'll support you forever!
（I am not good at japanese.So...and excuse me for any mistakes since my poor English.）
请认真仔细地帮我查看一下吧,希望能有真心的朋友帮助我,因为这篇作文真的是非常重要啊!而且我想把这篇作文写得委婉有礼貌一下,可惜各种有心无力,如果有什么建议的请提出来,我会感谢你们的出手相助的~
= =其实我已经修改完毕了。囧
It may be a little rude for me to write this letter to you.
But...
because today is my birthday,
I want to convey my mood on this day...
By chance I know you.I like your music and voice.
It sounds wonderful and it can give me power.
On my spare time,I read your blog though I don't fully understand.
But I am very glad that you can share something about you with fans.
It helps me know more about you.
I want to see your life and I can feel your charm in Japan.
You're the motive force to keep me go forward.
I'm not gotta think of the possibility whether I will be successful.
I hope my dream will come true some day.
I think I'll try my best.
If you can reply to me.It will be the best gift that I've ever received.
Last,please keep your struggle all along.
I'll support you forever!
（I am not good at Japanese.So...excuse me for sending to you in English.）
再问： 那个是in my spare time吧 还有哦，live=life，我的意思是live是演唱会~ = =就这些了吗 没有别的问题了？OJZ 那些简单的我自己修改过了~
再答： In my spare time,I read your blog though I don't fully understand all the contents. ..... I want to see your live show in Japan so as to feel your charm in person. .... Last, please keep your energy (struggle好像不太禮貌) all along.
再问： I want to see your live show in Japan so as to feel your charm in person （如果要加在某一天，在后面直接加some day就可以了吗） 最后那个struggle不是表示奋斗~energy代表活力or干劲？ 其实我想表达的是请你坚定地走下去~这样的话也能互通？？
再答： I want to see your live show in Japan some day so as to feel your charm in person. .... Last, please keep your insistence in ?? all along. ??是你请她坚定地走下去的東西.
But...
because today is my birthday,
I want to convey my mood on this day...
By chance I know you.I like your music and voice.
It sounds wonderful and it can give me power.
On my spare time,I read your blog though I don't fully understand.
But I am very glad that you can share something about you with fans.
It helps me know more about you.
I want to see your life and I can feel your charm in Japan.
You're the motive force to keep me go forward.
I'm not gotta think of the possibility whether I will be successful.
I hope my dream will come true some day.
I think I'll try my best.
If you can reply to me.It will be the best gift that I've ever received.
Last,please keep your struggle all along.
I'll support you forever!
（I am not good at Japanese.So...excuse me for sending to you in English.）
再问： 那个是in my spare time吧 还有哦，live=life，我的意思是live是演唱会~ = =就这些了吗 没有别的问题了？OJZ 那些简单的我自己修改过了~
再答： In my spare time,I read your blog though I don't fully understand all the contents. ..... I want to see your live show in Japan so as to feel your charm in person. .... Last, please keep your energy (struggle好像不太禮貌) all along.
再问： I want to see your live show in Japan so as to feel your charm in person （如果要加在某一天，在后面直接加some day就可以了吗） 最后那个struggle不是表示奋斗~energy代表活力or干劲？ 其实我想表达的是请你坚定地走下去~这样的话也能互通？？
再答： I want to see your live show in Japan some day so as to feel your charm in person. .... Last, please keep your insistence in ?? all along. ??是你请她坚定地走下去的東西.