03 As is vividly demonstrated in the pictures above,the tend

03 As is vividly demonstrated in the pictures above,the tender flower blossoms inside the greenhou
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As is vividly demonstrated in the pictures above,the tender flower blossoms inside the greenhouse in spite of the gusty wind,driving rain and terrifying lighting.Unfortunately,as soon as it is exposed to the thunderstorm,it soon fades and withers with its delicate washed away.
The main purpose of the painter can be interpreted in terms of a problem in the present education of our children.To begin with,the majority of parents tend to be indulgent to their children in our country.This is partly attributed to the arrival of the “only child” generation,who are pampered and spoiled by their parents or grandparents.Leading a life full of love and sweetness,these children are ignorant of failure,hardship,and the taste of tears that abound in real life.What’s more,the more protection they get from their parents,the less ability they acquire.Once they meet with some setbacks,they will feel frustrated and thus lose heart inevitably,which may well lead to tragedy of some kind.
To my way of thinking,counter-measure must be taken immediately so as to reverse the trend revealed in the pictures.On the one hand,we should bring home to people this type of child is not what we holp for the future of our country.On the other hand,parents should be sensible enough to give their children more freedom to deal with troubles and problems.As the old saying goes,“no cross,no crown.” Only in these ways can they achieve great success in the competitive world.

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