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帮我改改下面文章有没有错,
Just imagine for a moment that you are sitting in a concert hall.The conductor waves his shiny baton with a graceful swing through the air.A beautiful melody floats slowly around you.
When I was born,I sometimes listened to the light music to fall asleep.When I was four years old,I started to play the piano.It was my first time to actually contact with music.Gradually,I began to try to play some famous songs,just like “To Alice” “Swan Lake”.Sometimes,I listened the Classical music in my free time.I liked the Classical music very much because of my interest.For me,the interest is the best teacher .
With the growth of age,I spent less time playing the piano so I had less time listening to Classical music.Also because of the classmates around me,I liked the pop music.But now,playing the piano is one of my hobbies.I will play it if I am free.I enjoy this a lot.About listening the music,I listen all kinds of the music.I will listen to a different song in different situations.When I am down,music cheers me up.When I am lost,music guides me through.When I am tired,music soothes me gently.When I am weak,music lifts me up.Music is a part of my life.
n I think where there is life,there is music.Music lies in everyday life,in everyone‘s life,in everything we see,in everything we hear-- in the rhythm of the sea,in the whisper of a gentle wind,in the melody of a bird’s singing,in the harmony of village chimes.Music is eternal.Let’s enjoy music!
Just imagine for a moment that you are sitting in a concert hall.The conductor waves his shiny baton with a graceful swing through the air.A beautiful melody floats slowly around you.
When I was born,I sometimes listened to the light music to fall asleep.When I was four years old,I started to play the piano.It was my first time to actually contact with music.Gradually,I began to try to play some famous songs,just like “To Alice” “Swan Lake”.Sometimes,I listened the Classical music in my free time.I liked the Classical music very much because of my interest.For me,the interest is the best teacher .
With the growth of age,I spent less time playing the piano so I had less time listening to Classical music.Also because of the classmates around me,I liked the pop music.But now,playing the piano is one of my hobbies.I will play it if I am free.I enjoy this a lot.About listening the music,I listen all kinds of the music.I will listen to a different song in different situations.When I am down,music cheers me up.When I am lost,music guides me through.When I am tired,music soothes me gently.When I am weak,music lifts me up.Music is a part of my life.
n I think where there is life,there is music.Music lies in everyday life,in everyone‘s life,in everything we see,in everything we hear-- in the rhythm of the sea,in the whisper of a gentle wind,in the melody of a bird’s singing,in the harmony of village chimes.Music is eternal.Let’s enjoy music!
第二行,A beautiful melody ,A换成the.
第三行,I sometimes listened ,换成usually.
第四行,actually这个单词,你是想强调事实上么?如果是的话,放在句首.
第五行,I listened the,the前面加个to.
第七行,so I had less time listening to ,listening改成to listen,因为是have less time to do sth.
第九行,About listening the music,还是,the前面加to.后面的 I listen all kinds of the music,这个listen换成like吧.
倒数第三行,Music lies in everyday life everyone加个撇s吧.
你这后两段排比用的霸气啊,厉害,厉害,就是最后一段不用没个前面都加in的.
再问： 第一段会不会和后面有些内容不搭？文章结构内容怎样？因为我的配乐是童年的回忆。
再答： 有那么一点，这样吧，你末尾在加上这个，concert hall 的气氛是无与伦比的，在家里听决不能与之媲美，现场的气氛也是非常棒的，不会翻译的话，这几句我可以帮你写
再问： 我在前面那个交响乐的地方配了蓝色多瑙河，后面再开始放童年的回忆，就不用在后面加了，行不？
再答： 你这专业词好强啊，我也不是太懂了~·~总之首尾呼应注意下就好了，
第三行,I sometimes listened ,换成usually.
第四行,actually这个单词,你是想强调事实上么?如果是的话,放在句首.
第五行,I listened the,the前面加个to.
第七行,so I had less time listening to ,listening改成to listen,因为是have less time to do sth.
第九行,About listening the music,还是,the前面加to.后面的 I listen all kinds of the music,这个listen换成like吧.
倒数第三行,Music lies in everyday life everyone加个撇s吧.
你这后两段排比用的霸气啊,厉害,厉害,就是最后一段不用没个前面都加in的.
再问： 第一段会不会和后面有些内容不搭？文章结构内容怎样？因为我的配乐是童年的回忆。
再答： 有那么一点，这样吧，你末尾在加上这个，concert hall 的气氛是无与伦比的，在家里听决不能与之媲美，现场的气氛也是非常棒的，不会翻译的话，这几句我可以帮你写
再问： 我在前面那个交响乐的地方配了蓝色多瑙河，后面再开始放童年的回忆，就不用在后面加了，行不？
再答： 你这专业词好强啊，我也不是太懂了~·~总之首尾呼应注意下就好了，