雅思大作文练习 topic:Some people think intelligent children should

雅思大作文练习
topic:Some people think intelligent children should learn with others together,since it will benefit everyone,while other people think intelligent children should learn separately,and also should get special treatment.Discuss both points and give your own opinion.
下面是我写的.麻烦给评个分.最好能大概说下有哪些不足,
In the contemporary world,the key classes are not uncommon in many schools.However,there is no consensus on whether intelligent children should be taught alone yet.
Setting key-classes has its own advantages and disadvantages.In the first place,learning respectively has the exterior significant advantages of the distribution of instructional resources (e.g.,different title teachers,unlike level books or diverse difficulty exams).As a result,more professional teachers could use high-level books to teach the gifted children and test them by some difficult questions.Furthermore,setting the key-class could motivate other children’ potential learning motivation.More precisely,students who yearn for studying in the key-class would like to study harder.However,the move is likely blow to some students who are diffident.It seems that they would feel hopeless about their futures if they were not in the seeded classes.The worst circumstance probably happens when some students could not accept the reality-they are not the seed-they would be getting MDD even suicide.
If every student could be taught by the same surroundings,the cons and pros would be obvious.For one thing,those children who are unintelligent,especially when they found that they have disparities with those ‘geniuses’ beside them,would feel crisis and pressure about their study.To surpass,they would study harder and harder.Besides,ordinary children would not feel they have been ignored.It is this move of undivided that make their self-esteem getting maintained.Nevertheless,in fact,undivided classes’ teachers always feel strenuous about teaching these students who have not the same ability of study.They must consider about if they could understand,as a result,it would waste much time of either teachers or students.
Based on all the arguments offered above,I think the intelligent children should be teaching separately.As students,we should treat going into the seeded class as a target as well.Indeed,this is one of the demonstrations of our learning ability.
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哪些地方给你们模板的感觉?举例下啊.光说像模板我也不知道是哪里啊.

有很浓的模板味道,现在考官看出来很浓的模板味道有可能拉到5.5分了,因为我10月份考的.不过其他方面写的还挺好,可以6+ 看考官怎么评分了