帮忙修改一下政府英文信件,高赏

帮忙修改一下政府英文信件,高赏
这封信说的是一个化妆品公司举行了一场禁止射杀海豹的广告活动.然后海洋管理局出面写信给对方解释说 射杀海豹行为是人道的.
帮我看看那里要修改一下,这属于是劝说信件.改得好,我回看得出来,
Dear Sir or Madam
Your “End Canada’s License to Kill” Campaign is great.Thank you for caring about the seal hunt.However,the seal hunt provides a livelihood to thousands of coastal dwellers.These coastal dwellers supporting their families only rely on the seal products.
However,you do not have to worry too much.The seal hunt is conducted humanely.There are several rules that set up for all seal hunters.First,only six species of seals can be hunted,and baby seals can not be hunted.Second,the three-step process ensures that seals do not suffer unnecessarily (recommended by the Independent Veterinarians Working Group).Hunters must shoot or strike seals on the top of the cranium.After clubbing or shooting the seal,the hunter must check the animal’s eyes to ensure it is dead.If the seal is still alive,the hunter has to cut the animal’s main arteries immediately.These methods ensure the unconsciousness and a quick death of seals.
As a result,the seals will not suffer a prolonged and painful death.Your understanding and support would be much appreciated.I hoped you could withdraw this campaign.Thank you for your consideration.
Sincerely
The Department of Fisheries and Ocean

First Second 加ly
Sincerely 前加Yours
I hoped you could withdraw this campaign
hoped改成hope或was thinking if
不行了太困了……so be it