请高手帮我看看这封信中,有什么地方是错误的?

请高手帮我看看这封信中,有什么地方是错误的?
Dear comrade:
Hello.
I’m glad to write to you,how are you?
I’m live with my mother and my father.I love my parents.
You look handsome young!I think you are bright,energetic with strong career-ambition.
I don’t like takeing photo,but I will give you mine.can you guess which is me in the photo?
My telephoto number is 123456.Tell me your telephoto,please!
As a Chinese,English is difficult to learn,include grammar,tenses,pronunciation,all of these are difficult.Nowadays,English is very importance in this world,it's a international language,so we must keep to learn it.
I'm a poor guy on English.I'm a lazy girl to learn English,i'm only watch about English TV and listen to English music just for fun.我都快忍不住要和你说汉语了,呵呵!
Awaiting to hear from you soonest.
Your friend:Mary

Dear comrade:
Hello.
I'm glad to write to you.How are you?
I live with my mother and my father.(live是动词,就不用再用系动词am了).I love my parents.
You look handsome and young!(handsome和young都是形容词,应该是并列关系,用and).I think you are bright and energetic ,with strong career ambition.(bright,energetic 形容词并列,需用and 连接,而with strong career ambition是介宾短语,也相当于形容词,但由于有with,不能与前两者并列使用and)
I don't like taking photos(take加ing时需要把不发音的e去掉),but I will give you mine.Can you guess which is me in the photos?
My telephone(拼写错误) number is 123456.Tell me your number(虽然是告诉我电话的意思,但这是汉语的说法,应该是告诉我你的号码),please!
As a Chinese,English is difficult to lear,including (此处应该用ing形式来) grammar,tenses,pronunciation,all of which(非限制性定语从句需要用which而不是these/them) are difficult.Nowadays,English is very important(需要用形容词,而不是名词),it's an(international第一音节为元音,需要用an,而不是a) international language,so we must keep on learning it.(一直保持学习的状态)
I'm a poor guy in English.(在某方面用in,而不是on).I'm a lazy girl in learning English(在某方面用in).I(watch是动词,没必要再用系动词am) only watch about English TV and listen to English music just for run.I almost can't help talking with you in English.aha!
Awaiting to hear from you soon.(soon很快地,没有比较级和最高级之说)
You friend Mary