修改英语作文语法要对,真的,别混饭.我因为要参加比赛财富值都快没了,各位包容下.Dear teachers, dear

修改英语作文
语法要对,真的,别混饭.我因为要参加比赛财富值都快没了,各位包容下.
Dear teachers, dear students, how do you do! I'm from Hainan Middle School of XXX, I give you a speech on the topic of "the magic apple". Look, I in your hand?
Yes, this is an apple, a magic apple, its history is the history of our race and long. As early as in god created us the father of human-Adam and eve, commanded them not to steal to eat apple in the Eden. But they couldn't help the temptation of snake, and steal to eat the delicious forbidden fruit. After that, they immediately become depths, knowing good and evil demarcate...
This emblem of the fruit of the magic in the river of time drifts into 1665.
Autumn "full fruit under the apple tree, stood a graduate of the university of Cambridge in England, he is the hometown of the hillside thinking about problems. Suddenly, a gold ripe apple no immediate drop to the ground, but he hit the name of Newton young man's head, and blew up in natural science of the greatest and most brilliant theory-the law of universal gravitation.
Time and circulation in 1977.
A man called Steve jobs of American computer lunatic, because personally picking a friend in the apple orchard, a lenovo, “apple" as he founded the company name and logo. See, it is apple! It represents the became popular in the world's top electronic products, contracted, innovation, is an indispensable part of the modern life.
Now the pieces of the fruit of the magic in my hand, I want to turn it into a new shape. At this moment, I thought of the Steve jobs once said a words: "listen to the instructions of the heart and intuition, they know what you want to be." So, I started this medal of the fruit of the magical become like this now.
Now look like this.
Do you like?
Thanks.

Dear teachers,dear students,how do you do!
你这是个演讲吧?这样的开场白很像是写信哦!
建议改成：good morning ladies and gentlemen!
good morning可以换成你当时的时间,这样说还更幽默风趣,能引起大家的注意力.
I'm from Hainan Middle School of XXX,I give you a speech on the topic of "the magic apple".Look,I in your hand?
你不报自己名字么?
上句改成：my name is XXX,I'm from Hainan Middle School of XXX.
today,i will give you a speech called 'the magic apple'.
“Look,I in your hand?” 你想表达什么?
后面太长,没时间改了,你试试都copy到google translate里去,至少你能让google翻译看得懂吧!
再问： 谢谢，我是学生所以不用你的开场白了，这篇文章不是我写的……
再答： 学生也是可以用这样的开场白的，这是英语的幽默。建议多看看美国著名总统竞选的发言。