英语帮忙修改文章错误这个是我自己写,但是老师说过我很中式英语,所以不敢拿上台I hear a story about t

英语帮忙修改文章错误
这个是我自己写,但是老师说过我很中式英语,所以不敢拿上台
I hear a story about two man.one called knife,and one called fork.They were killer and no one can destroied them.They're so strong if they were together.So the government were very cared about them.
One day ,knife asked fork to a place and talked .Actually,they were brothers.A long time ago,their parents has been killed.They swore to killed the murderer.
Yes ,they were not believed this world again.
Knife found the murderer from their parents.He quickly to asked fork to remembered to with him to kill the murderer.Fork was really excited about that.But they were also famous killer,they could not stay together.
AT night,Fork has be killed by the government
Next day,Knife went to the murderer's house quickly.But he didn't see the Fork.When he was thinking about this,he heard a noice.It was the gun's.It must be the murderer's gun,but when he looked inside the house,he saw many police from the government.
He was dead
Some one said,Is the Fork to betray the knife.But no one know.Actrally the government are know their move at early
At the nether world,they're not brother anymore,they are personal enemy forever
请有能力的拜托了,好的还可以追加分数!

I hear 不是过去时吗?没改成过去时啊.man 前面有two,要改成men.第二个句子应该改成and the other one called fork.killer要改成复数形式.can后面是加动词原形的,而且用destroy不恰当,用beat比较好.第四句有点别扭啊.我觉得If they're together ,they will be very strong 更好.So the government were very care about them?觉得怪怪的.这是贬义的吧.改成So the government were very concerned about them.如果没学过那个词组的话pay attention to也是可以的.第二段第一句knife asked fork to a place to talk.第三句their parents had been killed.第四They swore to kill the murderer.第三段莫名其妙,怎么又again了呢?改成from then on.第四段.Knife found the murderer who killed their parents.He asked fork to kill the murderer with him immediately.But they were both famous killer,they could not stay together.其实我很郁闷著名跟不能在一起有什么关系.然后下段就让我吓到了.这叉子死得太突然了吧.算了.不扰乱你的行文.继续改Fork had been killed by the government.next day前要加the.下面.怎么又quickly了.删了吧.还有,我一直想说了.既然前面的刀子叉子没加the.这里就也别加了吧.When he was thinking about it,he heard a voice.It was the report of the gun.but when he looked into the house.It is because of Fork 's treachery.But no one know exactly.Actrally the government knew their action at first.At the another world.they won't be brother anymore.they will be personal enemies forever.纯手打.好累的.十一点多帮你改作文.多给点分吧.还有.这位小哥你读几年级啊?在哪里读?你老师说的还真不错.不过我看了半天不知道你这篇文章要表达什么.我只是改改语法错误.不管怎样.祝你学业有成啦.