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求英语高手帮看下这篇自我介绍有没有什么错误,我是准备考初中的,明天下午就要!

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求英语高手帮看下这篇自我介绍有没有什么错误,我是准备考初中的,明天下午就要!
Hello.My name is XXX and I'm twelve years old.I have just finished primary school and now I want to continue my education at this shool hopefully.I have learned Chinese,Maths and English.I like them very much especially English.I usually play badminton and other sports for a while after school.Besides sports I like painting and singing.I like American movies which improve my English a lot.I hope I can receive better education that's why I am here to try my luck.Thank you!
小小的提几点建议哦~一,感觉第三句hopefully去掉,这词有点多余突兀,如果要表达在这个学校继续学业是心中一直希望的,可以说I am very eager to study in this school.二,第四句中最好不要用have learned,就说learned便可.三,第七句中直接besides,后面的sports去掉,besides不是形容词.四,最后一句的try my luck太不正式,我不确定有没有这个词组,但想说感觉直接I am here就行,言简意赅,更显正式,自信.最后想说你现在才考初中,但词汇量,语法就掌握的挺多,好棒,再接再厉哦,相信你会更加的优秀
再问: Thank you very much!我会尽量改的!