帮忙改一篇英语作文The Rank Of Human Being In Our SocietyIn our societ

帮忙改一篇英语作文
The Rank Of Human Being In Our Society
In our society,there's a rank between us.On the one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other side of the rank ,is the poor.
There's hard to say what causes the question.In out country,farmers are despised by the people who live in cities.
Farmers signs dirty and poverty.But that's not an important reason.
In Chinese old opinion,the poor is in the low rank of our society.That's unfair.Fair,liberity,freedom are the spirts of a strong country.
However,there are a lot of normal people also live in the society.They lead a busy life but thet are happy.They make menoey hard.And the money for chilfdren's education,parents' medical treatment,and so on.
They are just like some bees,never feel busy.But they are really haapy persons.
We all know the opposite of POOR is RICH.
Our society ,however,the rich control it.In their eyes money is everything.A great man once said,money isn't everything.You can't buy your friendship with money,you can't vbuy your healthy body with your money,also,you can't buy happy with money.
Nowdays,many peolple kill themsleves.You may wonder why.They left words ,they felt bored,they didn't feel happy.
What I said means our society not balance.We nned a balance society to keep living.We should create a reall harmonious society and show the new China to the whole world.
可以适当得加一些比较高水准的长句啊~
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In our society,there's a rank between us.The one side of the rank,is the rich.And the other is the poor.
It's hard to say what causes the rank.
It can be a reason but not an important one that farmers,despised by the people who live in cities,sign dirty and poverty in some places in our country.
In Chinese old opinion,the poor is in the low rank of our society,which i think is unfair and yet equity,liberity,freedom are the spirts of a strong country.
However,there are a lot of normal people in the low rank also live in the society.They lead a their own life,just like some bees,feeling happy but never busy.They make money hard for chilfdren's education,parents' medical treatment,and so on.
We all know the opposite of POOR is RICH.
Our society ,however,is controled by the rich people whose eyes even contains by coins.A great man once said,money isn't everything.You can't buy your friendship with money,you can't buy your healthy with your money,also,you can't buy happiness with money.
Nowdays,many peolple with lots of money choose to kill themsleves.You may wonder why.They left words that though they wallow in money they could not feel warm and happy.
What I said means our society is not balanced.We need a balanced society to keep living.Thus,We should create a real harmonious society to help the poor and the farmers and show the new China to the whole world.
改了一些语法问题以及添加了一些帮助贯通句意的句子,还有就是用复合句缩写了一些我认为有些啰嗦的几组短句子 你看看成不成...