托福作文求改正和评分agree or not,getting advice from friends of an old

托福作文求改正和评分
agree or not,getting advice from friends of an older age would be more valuable than from friends your own age
When people are facing difficulties,they
always tend to get advices from friends at their own ages; I think this wont
help too much.In my opinion,getting the advices from elder people will have a
better effect.
To begin with,elder people have more experiences,
so their advices are sure to be more practical and useful,while peers’ advices
are usually base on their own perspectives and may not suitable for my own
needs.For instance,once I was conflicting in choosing elective courses,my
peers suggests me to take computer class,since it sounds very interesting,
whereas,I was urged by my friends in higher grade to take the art class.On
account of the elder friend’s experiences,I selected art class at last,and I
found the class quiet intriguing,what’s more,many of my peers who had chosen
computer class,complaining about how tedious the class is.Thus,I argue that
may be peers can give advices,but elder people can offer more than advices,it
is the experiences.
On the other hand,the advices from elder
people are more circumspect and prudent compared to peers’ advices.While the
elder people are making suggestions,they will count into the different consequences
that the peers’ will never think about.Like when asking about whether to take
entrance exams to postgraduate schools,my peers will suggest me not to,by
saving the money and time need to spend in studying,I can find a job and maybe
will have owned a lot of money.However,they have never counted into the
pressure in seeking a job by not taking the post-graduation study and so many
other factors which were proposed by my parents.So,only with a more prudent
suggestion made by elder people,then people can make a good decision.
Anyway,I concede that the advices from
friends at my own age,may be more easy to be accepted,since we are looking at
things in the same way.However,it is because of this reason,a bad advice may
lead me to make bad decisions and do harm to me.
Above all,I strongly believe that the
advices from an elder people are surely more useful and prudent,so getting
advices from them are sure to be more valuable.

When people face difficulties,they tend to ask suggestions from peers of their own ages.However,I don't think this would help a lot.In my opinion,getting advices from elder people would sometimes have a better effect.
In the first place,people older than you have more experiences and advice given by them would surely be more practical and helpful,since they have experienced things that you didn't get to do,and those advices would usually be given base on a different perspective than yours.For instance,once I was conflicting in choosing among several optional courses,my classmates suggested me to take a computer class which sounded very interesting.Whereas,I was encouraged by my friends in higher grade to take an art class.On account of the elder friend’s experiences,I selected art class at last,and I found the class quite fascinating.What’s more,many of my peers who had chosen computer class,started to complain about how tedious the class was.This is why I believe that older people usually give more reliable advices because of their experiences.
On the other hand,the advice from older people would be more circumspect and prudent compared to peers’ advices.When an adult is making a decision,they count into the different consequences and things the teenagers never think about.When asking about whether to take entrance exams to postgraduate schools,my peers will suggest me not to,because by saving money and time needed to spend in studying,I could find a job and will own a lot of money.However,they have never counted into the pressure in seeking a job by not taking the post-graduation study and so many other factors which were proposed by my parents.So,with a more prudent suggestion made by older people,we tend to make good decisions.
Above all,I strongly believe that the advices from an adult are usually more prudent,this is why I tend to get
advices from them.
楼楼我有个建议就是很多东西不要说的太绝对.always不如写成usually.surely都太绝对.应该说peers的advice固然不错,但是adult更好.我就改了一些语法错误,有问题可以追问或私聊.
我也是托福过来人,写作当时满分.>_