英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,非常非常感谢,一鞠躬：）

英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,非常非常感谢,一鞠躬：）
As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,the Internet is a spider web of thousands of networks,linking schools,universities,businesses,government agencies,libraries and millions of individuals.It is conceivable that the Internet plays an important role in our life for the time being.
The implied meaning which is conveyed in the drawing can be briefly stated in the following two aspects.To begin with,the Internet has a great influence on our lives.With the rapid spread of the Internet since the early 90’s,the communication between us becomes more and more frequent.No matter where they live,it is always very easy to express feeling to them if you would like.Hence,it is apparent that we are closely connected with each other thanks to the Internet.What’s more,there is no denying the fact that the meeting between friends are fewer and fewer.Something must be done in a face-to-face situation.For instance,we need to watch over the sickbeds of our nearest relatives to help them overcome the disease.
Accordingly,the internet is only a tool to facilitate some kinds of communication,and human relationship is much more than that,we must learn to balance the fictitious and real life.Only in this way can we enjoy a manifold and harmonious human relationship.

很地道的英文.不会是你写的吧?