请各位大哥大姐帮忙修改一下英语简历 100分!

请各位大哥大姐帮忙修改一下英语简历 100分!
翻译的好的话,把我的100分都压上了!辛苦了!
Work Experience
2010/3--2010/3:Novo Nordisk in China(>500 people )
Industry:Pharmaceuticals/Biotechnology
After Sale-service Department Part Time
＊Contacted with almost 500 patients and clients for serving the after sale-service and collecting the feedback of our product
＊To be the top sale in my team,due to the fact that nearly 60 peaple agree to persent in our activity
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2007/7--2007/9:the Second People Hospital of Guangzhou
Industry:Healthcare/Medicine/Public Health
Logistics Department Trainee
＊Analysed the data of the epileptic in the hospital.Draw a conclusion that which decisive factor effect the incidence of a disease
Practical Experience
2010/3--2010/3 Translation of the Pharmacological Document
＊Helped the teacher to translate the Pharmacological Document for the experiment
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2008/10--2008/10 Performance Team Leader for the Lazar-house
＊Organized and take part in the performance for the Leprosy patients
＊Communicated with the 50 patients and inspire them
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2007/9--2008/8 Master of the Evening Party
＊Master of the evening party which hold 300 students
＊responsed for the instant event perfectly
Leadership Position
2007/9--2009/9 Commissary in Charge of Studies in Class ＊Cooperate in harmony between the students and the teacher
＊Made of the “Win-Win”between a student and a teacher for the absence of the final examination
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2007/9--2009/9 The Minister of The Culture and Entertainment Department
＊Organized the music party that accommodate 1000 students.
＊Helped to prepare the organization of two evening parties which can hole 1000 students
＊To be the leader of the crisis team of our college for handling the problem which take place in the party

Here,I just checked the grammar and some terms.
Some paragraph I did not get,and I changed it as I understood or leave it as it is.
The resume's style should match to the company you apply for.
Good luck.
Work Experience
March 2010 - Present:Novo Nordisk in China
Industry:Pharmaceuticals/Biotechnology
Customs Service Department Custom Service Representative(Part Time)
＊Contact with almost 500 patients and clients in one month to follow up the service and collecting the feedback of our products
＊Be the star employee in my team according to my performance
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July 2007 - September 2007:the Second People Hospital of Guangzhou
Industry:Health-care/Medicine/Public Health
Logistics Department Trainee
* Analyzed the data of the epileptic in the hospital.
* Provided the suggestion regarding the conclusion which factors effected the incidence of a disease
Practical Experience
March 2010 - March 2010 Translation of the Pharmacological Document
＊Helped the teacher to translate the Pharmacological Document for the experiment
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October 2008 - October 2008 Performance Team Leader for the Lazar-house
＊Organized and joined the performance for the Leprosy patients
＊Talked to about 50 patients and inspired them
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2007/9--2008/8 Master of the Evening Party
＊Master of the evening party which hold 300 students
＊Handled complaints,inquiries,and disputes professionally
Leadership Position
2007/9--2009/9 Commissary in Charge of Studies in Class ＊Cooperate in harmony between the students and the teachers
＊Made the “Win-Win” situation between students and teachers
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2007/9--2009/9 The Minister of The Culture and Entertainment Department
＊Organized the music party that accommodate 1000 students
＊Assisted to organize two evening parties which holed 1000 students
＊Leaded of the crisis team of our college for emergency issues of the parties