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how to deal with the relationship between teachers and sudents 求修改.
一篇高三英语作文我写完了.请求修改,麻烦帮我看看语法,搭配,用词,单复数和三单等情况,最好能提出建议.我参加作文比赛.
The relationship between teachers and students
The relationship between teachers and students should be friendly and respectable.Sometimes we like a follower leaded by teachers or sometimes we’ll resist them with rivalry.
The impression of teachers which you look upon decides largely your positivity in their lesson.You’ll go after their thought and be buried in class if impression is good.Oppositely,boredom will affect you during study.
So we how to deal with the relationship?First,respecting teachers is essential principle for us,which we should recognize the importance of them.Second,their criticism is worth taking in by us honestly if we make mistakes need corrected.Last,we should understand their hard work because they spear no efforts to devote themselves to our tomorrow.
Teachers exactly as our parents guide us go forward without complaint.Let’s build a good relationship between teachers and us.

看楼主要参加比赛,我们就来好好谈一谈楼主的作文.
1,看作文还是先看结构：楼主说师生关系,所以在最后结尾的地方要回到师生关系上来.本来就是短文,所以全文都必须围绕师生关系展开.等会儿我们再改这个部分.
2,先来看下语法：
The relationship between teachers and students should be friendly and respectable.Sometimes we are like followers led by teachers and sometimes we’ll resist them with rivalry.The impression of teachers on you decides largely your positivity in their lessons.You’ll go after their thoughts and be buried in class if impression is good.Oppositely,boredom will affect you during study.So how do we deal with the relationship?First,respecting teachers is essentially principle for us,which we should recognize the importance of it.Second,their criticism is worth taking honestly if we make mistakes and need to correct.Last,we should understand their hard work because they spare no efforts to devote themselves to our future.Teachers exactly as our parents guide us go forward without complaint.Let’s build a good relationship between teachers and us.
3,改用词.这个部分比较困难一点,但是楼主可以通过大量的阅读来慢慢提高.这里就简单改一下：
Relationships between teachers and students should be friendly and respectable.Sometimes students just follow their teachers and sometimes they refute to defend arguments.（写论文就不要轻易用第一二人称,另外反驳叫refute是中性词,resist是一概不听老师的建议,rivalry是敌对是比赛和竞争的时候用的）
Teachers' impressions left on students largely decide students' performances in class.Students concentrated in class if the teacher of a certain class has good impression.On the contrary,awful impressions will bore students.（positivity是正向性,这里我可以理解成是正面态度,但是我觉得你其实想说的是课堂表现,所以改成performance,即使你想表达态度直接用attitude就好,而不是positive attitudes.中文也有这个道理,不能一面对应两面.be buried in的表达比较恐怖,我以为是人太多看不到脸了,虽然我知道你想表达什么.具体buried in用在这里好不好我不敢跟你说,但是concentrate是肯定没问题的,简单明了.）
So how do we deal with such relationships?First of all,students should respect teachers.Secondly,students should take teachers' feedbacks and even criticisms seriously,which are instructions for students to improve.Last but not least,students need to understand teachers' continuous efforts though teachers were not responsible for students' future.（前面都用了relationship的复数形式,所以全文最好保持统一,虽然语法没有相关要求,但是写作有对应的策略.principle是原则,principal才是重要；老师反馈叫feedback,critcism不算错但是要慎重,他是指负面的指责和批评.能够用实意动词的时候要用实意动词,比be动词的单纯描述更生动.spear是用尖的东西去搓,spare才是你要用的词.但是这里都不太好,应为段落结尾应该给老师一个正向评价才是文章的主题,所以我改成了让步语句.）
Teachers,like parents,guide students to move forward without complaints.It is important for students to establish good relationships between them and teachers and treat the relationships properly.（结尾要照应文章的中心,所以不止是尊重老师,更重要的是正确处理师生关系才是本文的主旨）
楼主的内容还是比较少,有点空；作文的核心还是在于有实质的内容和思考,并加上强力的逻辑描述.建议楼主先暂时拿给老师看一下,然后再反给我改.竞赛的话不好就这么去拿奖吧,但是也不要太担心,要相信自己的实力.