Nowadays,with the development of computer technology,it is p

Nowadays,with the development of computer technology,it is possible for students to study at home without going to school.However,whether students should study at traditional school or not different people may have different opinions.As far as I’m concerned,I strongly suggest that we must not abandon traditional schools though it is possible to study at home and there are two main reasons that I will outline below.
First of all,as we all know that school is like a mini society,students would have to deal with various kinds of troubles when they are studying at school.Through solving these problems students can learn many useful skills which are extremely important for them in the future and help them integrate into society easily.For example,by giving presentations to his classmates,a kid can tremendously improve his skill for speech and would not be afraid of public speaking any more.This,of course,cannot be acquired by studying at home.
Secondly,the school’s environment is more suitable for study.Students could discuss and solve problems together while studying at school.Besides,the teacher of a class can make his students concentrate on the knowledge they are about to learn and not be disturbed by other things.On the other hand,if students study at home,they could easily turn to other things which they think are more interesting such as playing computer games or watching movies and consequently ruin their studies.This happens frequently especially among young students.Therefore,it is clear that we need somebody to supervise students’ learning which is nearly impossible when studying at home.
In conclusion,there is no doubt for me that students should study at traditional school rather than study at home,because they can both learn useful skills and focus on studies at school instead of becoming an indoors man who stay at home all the time and cannot integrate into society.

整体来看这篇文章写的还是蛮不错的~就是几个地方帮你提一下..
1.However,whether students should study at traditional school or not different people may have different opinions.最好中间逗号下.different前面.
2.I strongly suggest that we must not abandon traditional schools.must不对,suggest后面表示建议应该是should,或者省略
3.that I will outline below...outline这个词似乎不太恰当..List,mention什么都可以
4.such as playing computer games or watching movies and consequently ruin their studies.这里and以后如果想表示并列,ruin...ing
5.which is nearly impossible when studying at home.这里nearly用almost会比较好
再问： 非常感谢！另外还想问一下，nearly和almost具体有什么区别呢？
再答： (1) 两者都可用来修饰不定代词、形容词、副词、动词、介词短语等，此时两者常可换用： It’s almost [nearly] impossible. 那几乎是不可能的。 He almost [nearly] always arrives late. 他差不多总是迟到。 The girl nearly(almost)fainted. 这姑娘差点(几乎)晕倒了。 They have almost [nearly] run out of food. 他们的食品几乎(差不多)已经吃完了。 He went out almost [nearly] every evening. 他几乎(差不多)每天晚上都出去。 It was nearly [almost] five thirty. 几乎已经五点半了。 He fell and almost [nearly] broke his leg. 他摔了一跤，险些摔断了腿。 (2) almost 可用于 any 以及 no, none, nobody, nothing, never 等否定词之前，但 nearly 一般不这样用： Almost any man can do it. 几乎任何人都会做。 Almost no one came to the party. 几乎没有人来参加晚会。 但是，两者都可用在否定动词之前： He almost [nearly] didn’t catch the bus. 他差点没赶上公共汽车。 (3) nearly 前可用 very, pretty, not 等词修饰，但 almost 之前不能用这些词： It’s not nearly so difficult as you think. 这远不像你想像的那么难。 【注】not nearly 意为“远非”, very [pretty] nearly 意为“几乎”，都是习语。 (4) 有时 almost 可表示十分相似(但又不完全相同)，此时不用 nearly： I almost wish I’d stayed at home. 我真有点后悔没在家里呆着。