作业帮请帮我评价一下这篇托福独立写作?
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请帮我评价一下这篇托福独立写作?
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One should never judge a person by external appearances.Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In most cases,one should never judge a person by external appearances.Sometimes when I walk down the street at night,I avoid people who are acting tough and loud,but in general,I prefer to reserve judgment until I get to know someone.Judging someone by external appearance can be deceptive.Judgments based on external appearances prevent you from getting to know a person reinforce stereotypes,and are superficial and limiting.
In high school,I stayed away from students who were called the "bad students" because they dressed a certain way.I wanted nothing to do with them.I later had the chance to meet one of these "bad students" because of our mothers,we started talking and I realized that we had a lot in common.My impression of him was very different once I got to know him.
If you form an opinion of someone based on stereotypes,you risk never getting to know someone who is different.You may are be missing out on an opportunity to make a good friend.In addition,you are reinforcing that stereotype by believing it without given the person a chance.If you take the time to get to know the person,you might become friends.
Judging people by external appearance is superficial and often unfair.After all,you don't know what circumstances the person might be facing or who the person really is.Perhaps the person comes from a less fortunate family than you and cannot afford the kind of stylish clothes your friends wear.However,that does not mean the person is less intelligent or interesting than you are.
People should not be naive about new people they meet,but should take time to get to know them.External appearance often does not tell us anything about a person.Judging someone by their appearance is misleading,reinforces stereotypes,and is limiting.Doing so could prevent you from making a true friend.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One should never judge a person by external appearances.Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In most cases,one should never judge a person by external appearances.Sometimes when I walk down the street at night,I avoid people who are acting tough and loud,but in general,I prefer to reserve judgment until I get to know someone.Judging someone by external appearance can be deceptive.Judgments based on external appearances prevent you from getting to know a person reinforce stereotypes,and are superficial and limiting.
In high school,I stayed away from students who were called the "bad students" because they dressed a certain way.I wanted nothing to do with them.I later had the chance to meet one of these "bad students" because of our mothers,we started talking and I realized that we had a lot in common.My impression of him was very different once I got to know him.
If you form an opinion of someone based on stereotypes,you risk never getting to know someone who is different.You may are be missing out on an opportunity to make a good friend.In addition,you are reinforcing that stereotype by believing it without given the person a chance.If you take the time to get to know the person,you might become friends.
Judging people by external appearance is superficial and often unfair.After all,you don't know what circumstances the person might be facing or who the person really is.Perhaps the person comes from a less fortunate family than you and cannot afford the kind of stylish clothes your friends wear.However,that does not mean the person is less intelligent or interesting than you are.
People should not be naive about new people they meet,but should take time to get to know them.External appearance often does not tell us anything about a person.Judging someone by their appearance is misleading,reinforces stereotypes,and is limiting.Doing so could prevent you from making a true friend.
1.“ wanted nothing to do with them” 你不觉得这句很怪吗
2.【Because of my mother】,I later had a chance to meet one of these “bad students”.(把逗号改成句号) We started talking 巴拉巴拉 是不是更好点
3.You 【take a risk】/ risk never 【going】 to know someone who is different
4.You 【are probably missing a chance】 to make a good friend.你写的太复杂而且我表示看不懂= = 怎么又是 are 又是be的,还有这里只用missing就好,opportunity是偶然的机会,我觉得不太好
5.People should not be naive about new people they meet,【instead,we 】should take time to get to know them.
6.Judging someone 【from his】 appearance is misleading.【Meantime,】reinforces stereotypes【 is limiting.】
“【】”是修改的地方,我个人意见,仅供参考~
我觉得你这篇文章还是理论太多,例子太少.第一段太长
每段之间最好都有点关系,然后用连接词,什么因果啊,承接啊多用用
老美逻辑能力不好,所以连接词很重要,他们不适合跳跃性思维.
2.【Because of my mother】,I later had a chance to meet one of these “bad students”.(把逗号改成句号) We started talking 巴拉巴拉 是不是更好点
3.You 【take a risk】/ risk never 【going】 to know someone who is different
4.You 【are probably missing a chance】 to make a good friend.你写的太复杂而且我表示看不懂= = 怎么又是 are 又是be的,还有这里只用missing就好,opportunity是偶然的机会,我觉得不太好
5.People should not be naive about new people they meet,【instead,we 】should take time to get to know them.
6.Judging someone 【from his】 appearance is misleading.【Meantime,】reinforces stereotypes【 is limiting.】
“【】”是修改的地方,我个人意见,仅供参考~
我觉得你这篇文章还是理论太多,例子太少.第一段太长
每段之间最好都有点关系,然后用连接词,什么因果啊,承接啊多用用
老美逻辑能力不好,所以连接词很重要,他们不适合跳跃性思维.