谁能帮忙给我的英文演讲稿提一下意见,还有做一下修改.演讲时间大概为一分钟,谢谢啦~~~~~ 文章如下

谁能帮忙给我的英文演讲稿提一下意见,还有做一下修改.演讲时间大概为一分钟,谢谢啦~~~~~ 文章如下
The days we had together
Good afternoon, everyone, I am Yang Xie comes from Class5. I am glad to share my experience with you. Happiness takes no account of time. We must say goodbye to ELBC and Class5. We will remember these days forever and ever.
1.BAD DAYS
At the first day of ELBC, we did not know each other very well, so most of us were too shy to talk. We were not familiar to the school, we even did not know where we can have meal. Everything looked like not very well. We did not have experience in presentation, it was hard for us to make and introduce a presentation. But everything is gonna be fine.
2.HAPPY DAYS
If we wept for the missing sunset, we would miss all the shining stars. Thanks to the activities and training, we have improved a lot. We had chance to walk outside, to visit the museum and experienced the different culture -----visited Little India. What was interesting was that we made a survey around our school. we can talked to many friendly people. We have prepared varieties of presentation. It is easy for us now. Thanks to Miss Irene and her teaching methods: we can only speak English in class, otherwise we will be fined.
Let’s pray for all of you, believe in ourselves when no one else does.

不错,修正了一点.
The days we had together
Good afternoon,everyone,I am Yang Xie comes from Class5.I am glad to share my experience with you.Happiness takes no account of time.We must say goodbye to ELBC and Class5.I am sure I will remember these days in my life time.
1.\x05BAD DAYS
At the first day of ELBC,we did not know each other very well,so most of us were too shy to talk.We were not familiar to the school,we even did not know where we can have meal.Everything did not go very well.AS a flash student ,we did not have experience in presentation,it was like a mission impossible for us to prepare and perform a presentation.But after those hard time,everything went fine now.
2.\x05HAPPY DAYS
If we wept for the missing sunset,we would miss all the shining stars.Thanks to all the teachers,after massive activities and training,we have improved a lot.We had chances to walk outside of the door,to visit the museum and experienced the different culture -----visited Little India.What was most interesting was that we made a survey around our school.we can talked to different people there,many of them are very friendly.We prepared varieties of presentation.It becomes easy for us now.Thanks to Miss Irene and her teaching methods:we could only speak English in class,otherwise we will be failed.
Let’s pray for all of you,believe in ourselves when no one else does.