改错误.30分钟内,多给.生日聚会邀请函

改错误.30分钟内,多给.生日聚会邀请函
Birgthday parth invitation
Dear Dofin,
Each person every year,an important day is own birthday.
6th of september is my birthday.
I'm going to hold an interesting birthday party,birthday party as the last of my childhood.
Thsi is my primary school last birthday.
I hope you have time to come to my house.
We will hold many meaningful activties,here you'll see what it is.
We will spend a pleasant night.
Lokking forard to seeing you.
Ihope you can come over again.
Your's,
XXXXX

Birthday party invitation
Dear Dofin,
Everyone has an important day per year, which is his or her birthday.
September 6th is my birthday.
I'm going to hold an interesting birthday party to remember the end of my childhood.
This is my last birthday in primary school .
I hope you have time to come to my home.
We will hold many meaningful activties,here you'll see what they are.
We will spend a pleasant night.
Looking forward to seeing you.
I do hope you can come over.
Your's,
XXXXX
再问： 能把改了的地方写出来吗？
再答： Birgthday parth invitation--Birthday party invitation
Dear Dofin,
Each person every year,an important day is own birthday.---Everyone has an important day per year, which is his or her birthday.
6th of september---September 6th is my birthday.
I'm going to hold an interesting birthday party,birthday party as the last---to remember the end
of my childhood.
Thsi is my primary school last birthday---last birthday in primary school .
I hope you have time to come to my house---home.
We will hold many meaningful activties,here you'll see what it is---they are.
We will spend a pleasant night.
Lokking forard to seeing you.---Looking forward to seeing you
I hope you can come over again.--I do hope you can come over.
Your's,
XXXXX

---后面的就是我改过的