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以持之以恒与实现梦想为主题 1、拥有梦想的意义 2、实现梦想需要什么品质 3、持之以恒对实现梦想的意义
解题思路： 理解作文内容，组织语言
解题过程：
你好，答疑如下
本文优点：布局合理；要点突出；有意识的运用了定语从句，名词性从句等较高级句型。
不足之处：句型重复：词性有误，词语理解失误和丢词现象。如：persist 动词，其形容词为：persistent
分数：20
改文：
It is a good thing to have a dream，for it brings you an ideal goal，which can motivate you to work hard. On the day of achievement，what you gain is not only the goal，but also many things you never thought of.
To make it，you，I think shall be persistent and remember what you really want all the time; Tell yourself you can do it and you are the best. Never give up.
Only by doing so，can those who never say NO realize dreams. Be persistent ，and you will be a success.
基本保留框架和句型。愿你满意，异议来电。
最终答案：略
解题过程：
你好，答疑如下
本文优点：布局合理；要点突出；有意识的运用了定语从句，名词性从句等较高级句型。
不足之处：句型重复：词性有误，词语理解失误和丢词现象。如：persist 动词，其形容词为：persistent
分数：20
改文：
It is a good thing to have a dream，for it brings you an ideal goal，which can motivate you to work hard. On the day of achievement，what you gain is not only the goal，but also many things you never thought of.
To make it，you，I think shall be persistent and remember what you really want all the time; Tell yourself you can do it and you are the best. Never give up.
Only by doing so，can those who never say NO realize dreams. Be persistent ，and you will be a success.
基本保留框架和句型。愿你满意，异议来电。
最终答案：略