作业帮请帮我改一下这篇英语作文.改得好追加.
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请帮我改一下这篇英语作文.改得好追加.
Now people have phone every day that means phone enter the person's life.Some people think that the phone is bad.The reasons are as the following;
1.If you dial a wrong number,you must pay expensive phone bill.
2.The phone radiation will harm for health.
Some people think that the phone is good.The reasons are as the following:
1.The phone is convenience.It can increase people’s contact.
2.The phone have lots of function.People like it.
3.The games are in the phone now.Students like play games everywhere.
I think that the phone is good,but it have lots of radiations.The radiations will harm for health,so we should use the phone less.
尤其是第一句,该怎么改啊.
改得好追加.
Now people have phone every day that means phone enter the person's life.Some people think that the phone is bad.The reasons are as the following;
1.If you dial a wrong number,you must pay expensive phone bill.
2.The phone radiation will harm for health.
Some people think that the phone is good.The reasons are as the following:
1.The phone is convenience.It can increase people’s contact.
2.The phone have lots of function.People like it.
3.The games are in the phone now.Students like play games everywhere.
I think that the phone is good,but it have lots of radiations.The radiations will harm for health,so we should use the phone less.
尤其是第一句,该怎么改啊.
改得好追加.
作文中的连接词很重要的,这些词一定要出现.英语的逻辑关系不像中文那样,不用表达也是“你懂的”的情况.这样改会比较符合英语表达.
Nowadays,almost everyone has their own mobile phones,which means that cellphones have already entered people's lives.However,some people think that using cellphones have more disadvantages than advantages.Their reasons are as follow:
If you dial a wrong number,you may need to pay expensive phone bill. must的话略显绝对
The phone radiation will harm people's health.
Other people think phones have more advantages:
Phone makes people's lives convenient(这个才是形容词). They can increase the chances to people's contact.
There are a lot of functions on phones.People like them.
There are also many games on cellphones now.Students like playing games on their phones everywhere.(哥我也常常玩 啊.哈哈)
All in all(总结时可以用这句),I think the phone is good,but the radiation is a problem,because it may be harmful to human's health.So,we should use phones less.
差不多吧
Nowadays,almost everyone has their own mobile phones,which means that cellphones have already entered people's lives.However,some people think that using cellphones have more disadvantages than advantages.Their reasons are as follow:
If you dial a wrong number,you may need to pay expensive phone bill. must的话略显绝对
The phone radiation will harm people's health.
Other people think phones have more advantages:
Phone makes people's lives convenient(这个才是形容词). They can increase the chances to people's contact.
There are a lot of functions on phones.People like them.
There are also many games on cellphones now.Students like playing games on their phones everywhere.(哥我也常常玩 啊.哈哈)
All in all(总结时可以用这句),I think the phone is good,but the radiation is a problem,because it may be harmful to human's health.So,we should use phones less.
差不多吧