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Has the emphasis on individualism in our society caused people to forget the importance of belonging to a community?

我给你提供一下我的思路吧,仅仅作为参考
首先第一段定义一下individualism is the concept which promote freedom of individual decision making without being influenced by authority, therefore, there is no way it will impede one's sense of belonging to his community. In fact, individualism is usually beneficial to one's success and consequentially the person who enjoys his success is more than likely willing to distribute a small proportion of his wealth to the community that raised him. Through this act, both the individual and his community share the benefit of individualism论点出来后,稍微扩充下.
第一段以小布什和老布什为例.小布什和老布什都是来自Taxas的总统,看看他们内阁的成员,几乎充满了Texas人,私人生日宴会也基本邀请Texas人等等,事实上,所以美国总统的administration都充满了当地人,任何一个成功的美国总统,都在当地社区有很高声望,否则洲竞选都无法脱颖而出.
第二段以商业为例,举例卡内基(Andrew Carnegie), 卡内基的成功就是受益于社区,他通过一个当地有钱人的慷慨借阅了他的私人图书馆,才获得了改变命运的途径.成功后,他在当地资助了许许多多的图书馆作为回馈.
最后总结下.From the example of George W Bush and Andrew Carniege, we can see large part of their successes should be attributed to individualism, however, we should not forget to give credit to the support of their community. In return, many community members shared the dividend of their success. In the former example, mang Texas people gained high portfolio in Bush administration, while in the latter one, Carnegie funded many community libraries in Pennsylvanian. Therefore it is tenable to conclude, instead of causing alienation in the community, individualism will actually strengthen the relationship between community and its individual member.
就是这样,参考下就好