作业帮求改英文演讲稿,看看有英语水平不好,帮我看看有没有语病就行.
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求改英文演讲稿,看看有英语水平不好,帮我看看有没有语病就行.
YOUTH•BELIEF•RESPONSIBILITY
Good afternoon,ladies and gentlemen,distinguished guests and honorable judges:
My name is XXX,from Ansteel Hot Strip Mill Plant automation workshop.It's my greatest honor to be here with you and it's really a valuable opportunity to improve myself and probably win this competition.
I am a native of Anshan,and I was born here,grew up here ,and I left here to go to college in 2006 ,but now I came back with an identity of Ansteel worker,because I love my hometown.
As a young man,I have passion and vision,I sincerely want to construct my hometown better .Great changes have been taken place in Anshan in recent years.The cities have a significant change,The environment is better than before ,I remember when I was young,Anshan's air was always overcast,and now the air finally become a blue sky which is inseparable from anshan’s virescence and reducing the industrial pollution.As a young person and Ansteel staff,I have the responsibility and duty to build a better Ansteel.So I will strive to learn the knowledge,do my job,.On this basis,I would like to contribute to Ansteel's environmental reform .I would protect Anshan’s environment with little things,for instance do not littering,not anywhere spitting,I think I have responsibility to contributing to building a good hometown.I want for my ideals for life.
That’s all.Thank you .
YOUTH•BELIEF•RESPONSIBILITY
Good afternoon,ladies and gentlemen,distinguished guests and honorable judges:
My name is XXX,from Ansteel Hot Strip Mill Plant automation workshop.It's my greatest honor to be here with you and it's really a valuable opportunity to improve myself and probably win this competition.
I am a native of Anshan,and I was born here,grew up here ,and I left here to go to college in 2006 ,but now I came back with an identity of Ansteel worker,because I love my hometown.
As a young man,I have passion and vision,I sincerely want to construct my hometown better .Great changes have been taken place in Anshan in recent years.The cities have a significant change,The environment is better than before ,I remember when I was young,Anshan's air was always overcast,and now the air finally become a blue sky which is inseparable from anshan’s virescence and reducing the industrial pollution.As a young person and Ansteel staff,I have the responsibility and duty to build a better Ansteel.So I will strive to learn the knowledge,do my job,.On this basis,I would like to contribute to Ansteel's environmental reform .I would protect Anshan’s environment with little things,for instance do not littering,not anywhere spitting,I think I have responsibility to contributing to building a good hometown.I want for my ideals for life.
That’s all.Thank you .
from automation workshop of Ansteel Hot Strip Mill Plant(部门一般从小到大）
to improve myself and to win this competition probably(后面少to,副词最好放在句尾,口语中位置可灵活处理）.
I am a native of Anshan,and I was born here,grew up here(这里前后半句有重复,native就是土生土长的意思,没有必要有后面的叙述,保留前半部分或者后半部分.）
I left here to go to college in 2006改为 i left for college in 2006更简洁些.
to construct my hometown better（better改为well,这里没有比较级的意思,要么就加上than before.)
overcast表示天阴,多云的意思,我不知道你在这里是想表达天气不好还是受污染了.最好换个词.
little things不妥,这样表达就是否定意思了,你想表达小事情,用small吧,或tiny.
to contributing to building （to 这里是不定式,不能接ING形式,用原型就行了）
另外你的句子不是很连贯,可以适当合并一下.不过演讲口语化比较重,不用太担心.
祝你演讲成功.
to improve myself and to win this competition probably(后面少to,副词最好放在句尾,口语中位置可灵活处理）.
I am a native of Anshan,and I was born here,grew up here(这里前后半句有重复,native就是土生土长的意思,没有必要有后面的叙述,保留前半部分或者后半部分.）
I left here to go to college in 2006改为 i left for college in 2006更简洁些.
to construct my hometown better（better改为well,这里没有比较级的意思,要么就加上than before.)
overcast表示天阴,多云的意思,我不知道你在这里是想表达天气不好还是受污染了.最好换个词.
little things不妥,这样表达就是否定意思了,你想表达小事情,用small吧,或tiny.
to contributing to building （to 这里是不定式,不能接ING形式,用原型就行了）
另外你的句子不是很连贯,可以适当合并一下.不过演讲口语化比较重,不用太担心.
祝你演讲成功.