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求高手帮忙批改一篇CET-4的作文.

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求高手帮忙批改一篇CET-4的作文.
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1.目前越来越多的人选择自驾游的方式旅行
2 自驾游的利与弊
3 我的观点
On self-drivingTour
Nowadays,there is a growing concern over theissue that more and more people go travel on self driving,for it may well come
as a surprise to learn between the advantage and disadvantage.
Some peoplethink that self-driving is dangerous,but in my opinion,self-driving is convenient.
Why do I hold this idea.There are a variety of factors which can account for
it.The most important reason is that I can drive to whatever I want in holidays.
Another majoy factor is that I needn’t to catch up with the schedule.The most
frequently stressed one is that we have a private zone in our car.
From what hasbeen discussed above,we may finally draw a conclusion that due attention
should be given to the self-driving tour,so as to make our life more colorful.
这篇作文如果满分是15分的话,可以得到多少分,还有就是有没有一些改进的意见,我需要意见.
我这只是套了一个模版,这种作文可以得多少分?
On self-drivingTour(tour是可数名词,应改为On the self-drivingTour )
Nowadays,there is a growing concern over the issue that more and more people go travel(改成travelling) on self driving,for it may well come
as a surprise to learn between the advantage(没有错,但最好加上s) and disadvantage(加s).
Some people think that self-driving is dangerous,but in my opinion,self-driving is convenient.
Why do I hold this idea.There are a variety of factors which can account for
it.The most important reason is that I can drive to whatever(wherever) I want in holidays.
Another majoy factor is that I needn’t to(可省略to) catch up with the schedule.The most
frequently stressed one is that we have a private zone in our car.
From what hasbeen discussed above,we may finally draw a conclusion that due attention
should be given to the self-driving tour,so as to make our life more colorful.
对于四级的作文,你的字数有点少,而且不符合上述三个题点,望改进!
再问: 四级120个到180个词。我已经140个了。 重点不是阐述我的观点吗 第一第二个我也已经提过了
再答: 1.目前越来越多的人选择自驾游的方式旅行 2 自驾游的利与弊 3 我的观点 这是作文的要求,第一点你没有直接说到,至于第二点要谈 自驾游的利与弊,应该是客观得写出优缺点,而你写的只有一个缺点,然后下面全是你认为的优点,你自己的观点(直接说出你的倾向,最好不要中立,)应该放在最后一段才符合题意。