作业帮请大家帮忙修改下我的自荐书吧,谢谢
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请大家帮忙修改下我的自荐书吧,谢谢
March 2, 2013
Foreign Trade & Business College of
Chongqing Normal University
Hechuan , Chongqing, China
Dear Sir/Madam:
Thanks
for checking and approving my self-application letter in your valued time!
First
of all, let me introduce myself, my name is Liu Jia , English name is Sophie,
is a senior of Foreign Trade & Business College of Chongqing Normal University,
majoring in normal English.
With youthful enthusiasm and desire
to know, I am about to finish the four-year journey seeking knowledge, a better
university life which cultivate my strict scientific way of thinking. I also
created positive and optimistic attitude towards life and the pioneering spirit
of innovation. Passionate, friendly and sincere are three aspects to modify my
characters. I am willing to work hard and have good cooperation with different
person.
Four-year professional learning during
the college has laid a solid foundation of English knowledge and relevant
theories .In the meantime; I have good achievements of language study and especially
with the Extensive Listening, Extensive Oral English and Japanese. In addition,
I am quite skillful in computer operation, passed the National Examinations in Computer
II (Language C) and adopted the CET examination.
Yet, I am not just a bookworm.
Instead, I am fond of various social activities. I joined in our Student’s
Federation, and have been the leader of one department because of my excellent
work ability. Moreover I served as both Publicity Secretary and Organization Secretary
in my class .During the holidays, I sometime took a part-time job as home tutor,
just for the purpose of putting what I learned in the school into practice.
Music eye and began my trip to Trinidad. Strength
of character is tested in a crisis. I would appreciate your time in reviewing
my enclosed resume and if there is any additional information you require,
please contact me. I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal
interview.
March 2, 2013
Foreign Trade & Business College of
Chongqing Normal University
Hechuan , Chongqing, China
Dear Sir/Madam:
Thanks
for checking and approving my self-application letter in your valued time!
First
of all, let me introduce myself, my name is Liu Jia , English name is Sophie,
is a senior of Foreign Trade & Business College of Chongqing Normal University,
majoring in normal English.
With youthful enthusiasm and desire
to know, I am about to finish the four-year journey seeking knowledge, a better
university life which cultivate my strict scientific way of thinking. I also
created positive and optimistic attitude towards life and the pioneering spirit
of innovation. Passionate, friendly and sincere are three aspects to modify my
characters. I am willing to work hard and have good cooperation with different
person.
Four-year professional learning during
the college has laid a solid foundation of English knowledge and relevant
theories .In the meantime; I have good achievements of language study and especially
with the Extensive Listening, Extensive Oral English and Japanese. In addition,
I am quite skillful in computer operation, passed the National Examinations in Computer
II (Language C) and adopted the CET examination.
Yet, I am not just a bookworm.
Instead, I am fond of various social activities. I joined in our Student’s
Federation, and have been the leader of one department because of my excellent
work ability. Moreover I served as both Publicity Secretary and Organization Secretary
in my class .During the holidays, I sometime took a part-time job as home tutor,
just for the purpose of putting what I learned in the school into practice.
Music eye and began my trip to Trinidad. Strength
of character is tested in a crisis. I would appreciate your time in reviewing
my enclosed resume and if there is any additional information you require,
please contact me. I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal
interview.
首先啊,同学,你真的是英语专业的么?你这文章.如果就这么递上去,老外肯定都看不懂.我帮你把一些话改得简练了些,但是,你自己也需要再添一些东西,外国人不懂大学里的什么publicity secretary,student's federation,你写了这个上去,人家肯定无感,你要写明,你在这个职称上做了哪些工作,让人了解你这些工作的意义和重要性,而非是一个空头职衔.包括你要稍微解释一下 student federation是什么(在我们学校,我估计这就是student union,我在美国读书) 你在哪个分支做了什么事情,这些才可以反映你真实的能力,让老外更了解你.
Dear Sir/Madam:
I am Liu,Jia.Please feel free to call me my English name,Sophie.I am a fourth-year English major about to graduate from Foreign Trade & Business College of Chongqing Normal University.
With youthful enthusiasm for knowledge,I entered my college.Here,I learned to enhance my strict scientific way of thinking,to hold an optimistic attitude towards life and to embrace a pioneering spirit of innovation.My strengths,in three words,are passion,friendliness and sincerity.Also,I am willing to work hard and cooperate well with different people.
My four-year professional training has laid a solid foundation of English knowledge and relevant theories.For example,I can do pretty well in English speaking and listening.(please prove this,any certificate or high scores in courses?) I am fluent in Japanese,too.My other skills include simple programming.I have passed the National Examinations in Computer II (Language C) and taken the CET examination,whose pending result will come out soon.
Academics is just one part of my college life.I also attended several social activities.As an active member of the college student’s federation for quite a long time,I have been elected as leader of one of its department.(describe what you did in student union in details) Moreover,I served as both Publicity Secretary and Organization Secretary in my class.(how long did you do this?What did you do as a secretary)
During the holidays,I sometime worked part time as a home tutor because I want to spread the knowledge and put what I learned in the school into practice.(how long did you work as a tutor?) Music eye and began my trip to Trinidad(whats this?What do you learn and benefit from this trip?).
Thanks for reviewing and evaluating my application.I’m looking forward to meeting you in person and letting you know more about me.
如果我是你,我会略去第三段,因为这些都通过你的证书看得到,不用再重复一遍了,第四段讲社会活动的要重点写,如果里面还有牵涉到英文专业的运用的话,更要重点指出.
虽然不想打击你,但是,你这封原信没让我看到你出色的英语能力,祝福你口语好一些.多看些英语原文书吧,英语专业的英语水平不应该只有这些
Dear Sir/Madam:
I am Liu,Jia.Please feel free to call me my English name,Sophie.I am a fourth-year English major about to graduate from Foreign Trade & Business College of Chongqing Normal University.
With youthful enthusiasm for knowledge,I entered my college.Here,I learned to enhance my strict scientific way of thinking,to hold an optimistic attitude towards life and to embrace a pioneering spirit of innovation.My strengths,in three words,are passion,friendliness and sincerity.Also,I am willing to work hard and cooperate well with different people.
My four-year professional training has laid a solid foundation of English knowledge and relevant theories.For example,I can do pretty well in English speaking and listening.(please prove this,any certificate or high scores in courses?) I am fluent in Japanese,too.My other skills include simple programming.I have passed the National Examinations in Computer II (Language C) and taken the CET examination,whose pending result will come out soon.
Academics is just one part of my college life.I also attended several social activities.As an active member of the college student’s federation for quite a long time,I have been elected as leader of one of its department.(describe what you did in student union in details) Moreover,I served as both Publicity Secretary and Organization Secretary in my class.(how long did you do this?What did you do as a secretary)
During the holidays,I sometime worked part time as a home tutor because I want to spread the knowledge and put what I learned in the school into practice.(how long did you work as a tutor?) Music eye and began my trip to Trinidad(whats this?What do you learn and benefit from this trip?).
Thanks for reviewing and evaluating my application.I’m looking forward to meeting you in person and letting you know more about me.
如果我是你,我会略去第三段,因为这些都通过你的证书看得到,不用再重复一遍了,第四段讲社会活动的要重点写,如果里面还有牵涉到英文专业的运用的话,更要重点指出.
虽然不想打击你,但是,你这封原信没让我看到你出色的英语能力,祝福你口语好一些.多看些英语原文书吧,英语专业的英语水平不应该只有这些