作业帮帮我改修一下这段话事关我的未来,大家帮我看一下下面这段话,有没有什么语法错误,或者是哪些句子可以表达得更完美,感激不尽啊
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帮我改修一下这段话
事关我的未来,大家帮我看一下下面这段话,有没有什么语法错误,或者是哪些句子可以表达得更完美,感激不尽啊
I try to forget a girl but i can't,I never stop missing the girl.In my memory of the last day at class 4,a boy looked at the girl and thought for a long time.But unfortunatlty the boy didn't say anything to the girl.He just left class 4 by himself.
From that day to the first day at middle school,the boy wished to become the girl's classmate again and every night he hoped to god could make his dream come true.One day the boy
had a dream.He dreamed he's dream became ture.He became the girl's classmate and also deskmate .When the boy got up,he knew that was only a dream,the most beautiful dream that he has dreamed.
The first of the middle school,when the boy was sitting in his own classroom he saw the girl was in the corridor,the boy was so surprised.He walked on and asked which class was the girl in the boy hoped they could be together,but the girl told the boy she was in the class that beside him.The boy was sad and he knew the god told a lie,too.
1 month past,the boy's birthday came.The boy was lonely because nobody sent him a present,although his best friend.He thought if someone sent him a present or a wish he will be happy.The boy couldn't forget that thursday.After class,the girl came and say "happy birthday"to the boy.Maybe the girl didn't know how happy the boy was.
The next week,the girl phoned the boy and asked him to waited the girl at 1:30.When the boy arrive,the girl has waited him for 10 minutes.But the girl didn't know,the boy was on the balcony and looked for the girl from 1;15 to 1;30.The girl gave the boy some chocolate,but boy didn't think so.The boy thought they were memory in primary school of the girl and boy share together.The boy wanted to say something but he didn't.The girl was the first person who sent the boy present and the girl was the last,too.
These many pockets of chocolate stand for memory of the boy's 13 birthday .
The girl's birthdady has came .The boy shows the girl his real heart.Does the girl know?The boy also wants to say something in his heart to the girl:I show my heart to you,baby.You know?I will try my best to love you,more than forever.Until the moment you won't love me anymore.I think is not so late.Girl,How do you think?
事关我的未来,大家帮我看一下下面这段话,有没有什么语法错误,或者是哪些句子可以表达得更完美,感激不尽啊
I try to forget a girl but i can't,I never stop missing the girl.In my memory of the last day at class 4,a boy looked at the girl and thought for a long time.But unfortunatlty the boy didn't say anything to the girl.He just left class 4 by himself.
From that day to the first day at middle school,the boy wished to become the girl's classmate again and every night he hoped to god could make his dream come true.One day the boy
had a dream.He dreamed he's dream became ture.He became the girl's classmate and also deskmate .When the boy got up,he knew that was only a dream,the most beautiful dream that he has dreamed.
The first of the middle school,when the boy was sitting in his own classroom he saw the girl was in the corridor,the boy was so surprised.He walked on and asked which class was the girl in the boy hoped they could be together,but the girl told the boy she was in the class that beside him.The boy was sad and he knew the god told a lie,too.
1 month past,the boy's birthday came.The boy was lonely because nobody sent him a present,although his best friend.He thought if someone sent him a present or a wish he will be happy.The boy couldn't forget that thursday.After class,the girl came and say "happy birthday"to the boy.Maybe the girl didn't know how happy the boy was.
The next week,the girl phoned the boy and asked him to waited the girl at 1:30.When the boy arrive,the girl has waited him for 10 minutes.But the girl didn't know,the boy was on the balcony and looked for the girl from 1;15 to 1;30.The girl gave the boy some chocolate,but boy didn't think so.The boy thought they were memory in primary school of the girl and boy share together.The boy wanted to say something but he didn't.The girl was the first person who sent the boy present and the girl was the last,too.
These many pockets of chocolate stand for memory of the boy's 13 birthday .
The girl's birthdady has came .The boy shows the girl his real heart.Does the girl know?The boy also wants to say something in his heart to the girl:I show my heart to you,baby.You know?I will try my best to love you,more than forever.Until the moment you won't love me anymore.I think is not so late.Girl,How do you think?
I am trying to forget a girl, but I can't. I can't stop missing the girl. According to my memory, the last day in Class 4. A boy stared at the girl and was thinking of something for a long time. The boy didn't say anything to the girl, he just left Class 4 by himself.
It's the start of the middle school. The boy wants to become the girl's classmate again, just like they were in primary school. Every night in the holiday, he prayed to the God that his dream may come true. One night, the boy had a dream. In the dream, he became the classmate of the girl, and they also seat next to each other (deskmate). When they boy got up, he thinks that it was the most beautiful dream that he has ever dreamed.
The first day of the middle school, the boy was sitting in his classroom. He saw the girl in the corridor, outside his classroom. The boy was suprised and he walked to the girl and asked her which class is she in. The boy hopeed that they will be at the same class. But the girl tell him that she is in the class which is next to his. The boy felt sad and understood that God didn't answer his prays.
A month later, it was the boy's birthday. The boy felt lonely because no one sent him any present, even his best friends. He was thinking just if anyone can send him a present to make him happy. It was Thursday after school. The boy can never forget this: the girl came over to him and said "Happy Birthday" to the boy. The boy became so happy. The girl wouldn't know how happy was he.
The next week, the girl gave the boy a call and wantst to meet him at the 13:30. When the boy was there, the girl told him that she had waited for him for 10 minutes already. But the girl didn't know, the boy was looking at her in a balcony from 13:15 till 13:30. The girl gave the boy some chocolate. They shared their memories when they were in primary school. The boy felt like to say something to the girl. But he didn't. The girl is the first and the last person who sent a present to the boy.
The poeckets on the chocolate stand for the memory of the boy's 13th birthday. The girl's birthday had come. The boy wants to show the girl his real heart. The boy wants to say: I will give my heart to you honey. Do you know that I will try my best to love you. I will love you till the moment you don't love me.
I think it is not to late to say that, right? What do you think girl?
什么吗, 整一情书.
lz小小年纪就上百度找月老.真强悍.
话说那girl是你们班的英语课代表还是什么?
推测下,你成绩中上. 可是这篇东西还是错得七七八八,草草帮你改了下.改动了很多顺序和表达方式.我在国外哦,改完后英语比较地道了点.怎么样?
本来看你这一大篇东西才15分都不想做,想想帮小孩还是应该的
追点分吧, 顺便祝你早日追她到手.
不罗嗦了.另外加一句话：不要谈恋爱忘读书哦!
要以恋爱为力量,为帮助,为支持读好书.（比如和她一起作功课之类的）.这样我的付出才得值得, 呵呵
It's the start of the middle school. The boy wants to become the girl's classmate again, just like they were in primary school. Every night in the holiday, he prayed to the God that his dream may come true. One night, the boy had a dream. In the dream, he became the classmate of the girl, and they also seat next to each other (deskmate). When they boy got up, he thinks that it was the most beautiful dream that he has ever dreamed.
The first day of the middle school, the boy was sitting in his classroom. He saw the girl in the corridor, outside his classroom. The boy was suprised and he walked to the girl and asked her which class is she in. The boy hopeed that they will be at the same class. But the girl tell him that she is in the class which is next to his. The boy felt sad and understood that God didn't answer his prays.
A month later, it was the boy's birthday. The boy felt lonely because no one sent him any present, even his best friends. He was thinking just if anyone can send him a present to make him happy. It was Thursday after school. The boy can never forget this: the girl came over to him and said "Happy Birthday" to the boy. The boy became so happy. The girl wouldn't know how happy was he.
The next week, the girl gave the boy a call and wantst to meet him at the 13:30. When the boy was there, the girl told him that she had waited for him for 10 minutes already. But the girl didn't know, the boy was looking at her in a balcony from 13:15 till 13:30. The girl gave the boy some chocolate. They shared their memories when they were in primary school. The boy felt like to say something to the girl. But he didn't. The girl is the first and the last person who sent a present to the boy.
The poeckets on the chocolate stand for the memory of the boy's 13th birthday. The girl's birthday had come. The boy wants to show the girl his real heart. The boy wants to say: I will give my heart to you honey. Do you know that I will try my best to love you. I will love you till the moment you don't love me.
I think it is not to late to say that, right? What do you think girl?
什么吗, 整一情书.
lz小小年纪就上百度找月老.真强悍.
话说那girl是你们班的英语课代表还是什么?
推测下,你成绩中上. 可是这篇东西还是错得七七八八,草草帮你改了下.改动了很多顺序和表达方式.我在国外哦,改完后英语比较地道了点.怎么样?
本来看你这一大篇东西才15分都不想做,想想帮小孩还是应该的
追点分吧, 顺便祝你早日追她到手.
不罗嗦了.另外加一句话：不要谈恋爱忘读书哦!
要以恋爱为力量,为帮助,为支持读好书.（比如和她一起作功课之类的）.这样我的付出才得值得, 呵呵