首档要求，改完的文一定要准确无误的语法.......因为是升级的口语测试。三分钟背，我在家掐了秒表，这篇文大约3分钟，字

首档要求，改完的文一定要准确无误的语法.......因为是升级的口语测试。三分钟背，我在家掐了秒表，这篇文大约3分钟，字数应该不成问题。这篇文花了一些功夫写.......不过语法肯定会有不足，希望老师严格点，有错指出，还请老师把有拼写或语法错误的地方用红笔标明，并告诉我怎么写正确，谢谢！ My childhood Because of my parents enlighten, I was get through of my childhood with happiness. Because of my friends, I knew what a friend should be. Because of my teachers, I learnt a lot of how to do the best. The people who around me, they caring me, and hope with a long time. When I was small, I told to my mother that I should bear in the quite and beautiful autumn, but not the hot and dry summer. In my opinion, autumn was more similar to my character. But my mother said, everyone came to this world with the best time of his develop, be late or early, both were unlucky, and lost some important minutia. Let’s talk about my childhood. From five to seven years old, my hair was short and nearly earlobes, many people said I was like a boy. In fact, I am not very lively. Everyday, I just stayed with fair tales or children’s CDs, but I am not a bookworm. I also liked to play with my friends, but not often, because of our different hobbies. At that time, the most valuable things of me are free and pure. When I went to primary school, teachers taught me a lot, such as shouldn’t argue or fight with others, urbanity to parents……yeah, I learnt a lot, but also constrain of these proprieties. We were still very pure that time. But now I find the distance between me and my classmates, that is test score. It separate us. Because we understood what is excellent and what is envy. We are working for the bright future very hardly, but throw those golden times away, forget what is friendship, just be happy with once praise from teachers. I heard pure was broken. Mostly time, I don’t know what should I talk to my classmates. My mother usually told me to talk more. I tried many times to get close hearts with my friends. But I couldn’t success. I really want to come back to childhood, if destiny can let me choose again. I will still choose pick up the little stones, but not press the piano keys. I will choose play with my friends but not watch the TV. I will choose breath the fresh air outside but not watch the birds fly away by the window side. When I moved the house, I said goodbye with my good friends, slowly, with time, forgot the happy of childhood. Now, I lost these goodliness, but I am happy of I have had them before, the happy time of childhood was leave over some tinge shadows. It is much better than never have. 真的万分感谢！

解题思路： 孩子，你这篇文章中文式的英语表达太多，如果对你很重要的话，你还是别用为好。
解题过程：
My childhood
With my parents enlightening, I got through of my childhood with happiness. Because of my friends, I knew what a friend should be. Because of my teachers, I learnt a lot of how to do the best. The people who around me, take care of me, and hope with a long time. (这句是什么意思？？把它去掉，完全错误） When I was young,I told my mother that I should be born in atumn, not the hot and dry summer. In my opinion, autumn was more similar to my character. But my mother said, everyone came to this world at the best time of his development, late or early, both were unlucky, and would lost some important minutia.
Let’s talk about my childhood. From five to seven years old, my hair was short, many people said I was like a boy. In fact, I was not very lovely. Everyday, I just stayed with fair tales or children’s CDs, but I wasnot a bookworm. I also liked to play with my friends, but not often, because of our different hobbies. At that time, the most valuable things of me are freedom and purity
When I went to primary school, teachers taught me a lot, such as shouldn’t argue or fight with others, be good to parents……,I learnt a lot.I was still very pure at that time.
But now I find the distance between me and my classmates, that is test score. It separates us. We are working for the bright future very hard but throw those golden times away, forget what is friendship, just be happy with one praise from teachers. I heard pure was broken. Mostly time, I don’t know what should I talk to my classmates. My mother usually told me to talk more. I tried many times to get close to my friends.
But I couldn’t succeed
I really want to come back to childhood, if destiny can let me choose again. I will still choose to pick up little stones, but not press the piano keys. I will choose play with my friends but not watch the TV. I will choose breathe the fresh air outside but not watch the birds fly away by the window side.
When my family moved , I said goodbye to my good friends, I am happy that I have had them before, the happy time of childhood was left over some tinge shadows. It is much better than never have.
最终答案：略