作业帮小学英语作文修改请帮忙修改以下作文(小学水平),是关于感动的事情.是如果可以,请增加点内容.Everyone will
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小学英语作文修改
请帮忙修改以下作文(小学水平),是关于感动的事情.是如果可以,请增加点内容.
Everyone will have something affecting.So do I.
When I was in grade three two years ago,I had a fever,but I still went to school.In P.E.class,I was running on the playground under the hot sun.The sunlight was so shining and there wasn’t any wind on the playground.At first,I felt nothing,but after kept running for a few minutes,I felt too tired to run,so I took a rest at the side of the playground.
Just then,our P.E.teacher asked us to play soccer.Soccer is my favourite sport and I love it.So I joined in the game again.I was so excited to kick the ball on the playground.I was blowing and sweating.And I kicked the ball into the goal,I was very happy.Suddenly,I didn’t know what happened,I fell down on the playground.
When I wake up,I saw my teacher and classmates were around me.They were very worried about me.Some of them was wiping off my sweat,some of them was fanning my face with their hands.And my teacher was putting medicine oil on my head.I felt much better.
I had never known they were so care me.I was very touched,and I thank them for helping me so much.
请帮忙修改以下作文(小学水平),是关于感动的事情.是如果可以,请增加点内容.
Everyone will have something affecting.So do I.
When I was in grade three two years ago,I had a fever,but I still went to school.In P.E.class,I was running on the playground under the hot sun.The sunlight was so shining and there wasn’t any wind on the playground.At first,I felt nothing,but after kept running for a few minutes,I felt too tired to run,so I took a rest at the side of the playground.
Just then,our P.E.teacher asked us to play soccer.Soccer is my favourite sport and I love it.So I joined in the game again.I was so excited to kick the ball on the playground.I was blowing and sweating.And I kicked the ball into the goal,I was very happy.Suddenly,I didn’t know what happened,I fell down on the playground.
When I wake up,I saw my teacher and classmates were around me.They were very worried about me.Some of them was wiping off my sweat,some of them was fanning my face with their hands.And my teacher was putting medicine oil on my head.I felt much better.
I had never known they were so care me.I was very touched,and I thank them for helping me so much.
"on the playground" is better replaced by "above the playgound"
"after kept running for a few minutes" should be replaced by "after keeping..."
"I love it" careless enough to 4get type the letter "d"?
"I fell down on the playground" ok,just in my opinion,"i fainted" is better.
"after kept running for a few minutes" should be replaced by "after keeping..."
"I love it" careless enough to 4get type the letter "d"?
"I fell down on the playground" ok,just in my opinion,"i fainted" is better.